While you clearly have a firm grasp on Dark Leonardo's personality and voice, there were a few issues with your app.
The main problem is the numerous grammar and spelling mistakes. We suggest that you find friend to help you proofread your app before resubmitting it (this can be easily done over the web by copy-pasting and then sharing over Google Documents).
The second problem is that both of your writing samples are too short. We require 300 words at least in the third person sample (there are only 231), and we require at least nine sentences in the first person (there are only 7).
Please correct these, respond with the edited app, and we will re-evaluate! Thank you!
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The main problem is the numerous grammar and spelling mistakes. We suggest that you find friend to help you proofread your app before resubmitting it (this can be easily done over the web by copy-pasting and then sharing over Google Documents).
The second problem is that both of your writing samples are too short. We require 300 words at least in the third person sample (there are only 231), and we require at least nine sentences in the first person (there are only 7).
Please correct these, respond with the edited app, and we will re-evaluate! Thank you!